100 WC Bryce 9/13

The Fight of Bob and Bobby One afternoon at a city two men named bob and bobby were trading things like copper, coth, and food. A little after the trade they were fighting each other because bob found a spy from bobby to steal their food. A month later they made up because bobby finally gave up and gave back the food. The trading continued and they can live peacefully in Georgia.

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  1. Foxteach1September 14, 2019 at 1:50 PM

    I like the way you imagined this as a scene, and you have correctly identified the time period by discussing trading. As your reader, I would appreciate more details about why Bob would find a spy and steal food--that would have helped flesh out your piece. You also want to be sure you edit for capitalization before publishing.

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